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One month to the day,
that you said you’ll never change,
But as always your promises turn out to be lies.

Walking through the sewers of my broken heart,
see this place, rotten and fallen apart,
this place wasn’t supposed to be this dark.

You and me we used to talk,
in this secret place in the depths of my heart,
where the river floats out towards the dark.

A river once so blue and clear,
but now this seems to disappear,
The river now is nothing but,
acid of sour and venom so bittersweet.

This river where we used to walk,
this river that floats out to the pier,
where the paper boats disappear.

Me, I try to send this note,
float it like a paper boat.

But paper sinks,
and words are weak.

I try,
but I don’t speak.
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GillyZ Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I feel like this, these days...
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xthumbtakx Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2010   Photographer
Hi! I was just curious, would it be alright to use this in a contest I'm entering soon? I haven't decided yet on which piece I'll use, but I'd like to use this one.. The contest can be found here: [link] - just let me know if I have your permission in advance! Thanks a bunch!

And beautiful work! :dalove:
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xwcg Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010
As far as I can read, you have to make an original entry for the contest, i.e. something you write on your own.

But if it is allowed, please go ahead. But use my deviation as the entry, and do not submit it as your own creation.
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xthumbtakx Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2010   Photographer
Nope, there's a part that clearly states "*You must select a piece of literature that is a deviation here on dA that is NOT your own and is not under a mature content filter." But thank you so much! I'll definitely let you know if I use it, and I was never planning on using it as my own. Don't worry, all credit goes to you! :)
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Jazuar Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2008  Student Digital Artist
awesome ending ; )
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xwcg Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2008
thanks :) :hug:
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blueambrosia3 Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008
Beautiful!
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xwcg Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2008
Thanks! :hug: :)
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GillyZ Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
i'm speachless...
freaking wonderful poem...
i'm like O.o' "wow!"
seriously.
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xwcg Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2008
Thank so so much!! :hug:
I hope that you also liked my other poems :)
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